This is my narrative and it is going in my report. It's quite a good story about some guy going to a abandoned house.
The abandoned house
Vroom vroom goes the car Joey and Jimmy was going on a trip to a abanid house. We were hoping to see some stuff that was scary. When we finally got to the abanid house we hopped out of the car. It was saying no trespassing but we ignored it. We could see a lot of graffiti. We could here laughing coming from a room. We went in the room I could see a white figure!! In the room as soon as we saw it we knew it was a ghost!! we went out of the room I was going to go in another room. But the door shut on me i was backing away from the door but i backed into some fen i slowly turn around it was joey!! scaring me hahaha we fort it's time to get out of the house. On the way out at the door I could see a Doll behind us joey was trying to open the door he finally opined it we hopped in the car and went out of the property :O omg we are never going to that house.
Well done David I love this story
ReplyDeleteWell done David. I like the vocab and the detail that you have put in. Keep it up David. I like the explaining that was very scary . Keep it up. Well done David.
ReplyDeleteWell done David i really liked how you used some very cool language like ignored and trespassing. I really like stories like that.Nice punctuation as well.I also liked how how you added the omg that made me laugh.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the great work. :)
Well done David, I love the detail in this, you used some very cool language features in this. I like how it was very scary but really funny how you ignored the trespassing sign. Keep up the awesome blog posts and the great writing because this pretty cool. Keep up the awesome work.
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